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Postby jamestoffee » January 7th, 2012, 5:41 am

SSG10-Week10 Room

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Climb to the 4th floor up spiral stairs
No doubt you'll find me sitting up there
Like a dragon recluse; safe in his lair
Like a Rapunzel who's cut off her hair

Each wall is filled with books sentimental
Each book a doorway to worlds of potential
Obsessed with making musical art
Writing, recording and playing guitar

Chorus
Is there room where thoughts like these unfold?
Is there room there was once I suppose
Is there room in a song writer's life
Room for his children and his wife

I EBay and Twitter from my ivory tower
Hotmail and Google hour after hour
Checking assignments at SSG
Posting my comments vigilantly

Chours 2
Is there room where thoughts like these unfold?
Is there room there was once I suppose
Is there room in a song writer's life
Room for his children and his wife
Make room; make room
Cause I'm moving back into my life

Bridge
Can two lifetimes fit into one?
If not what's to be done?

Chorus 2
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Postby andygetch » January 8th, 2012, 6:21 pm

James,
I really liked the trip to your room with the "is there room" hook. Quite possibly the first time in song history that SSG has been rhymed with viligantly! The one thing that threw me a little is the his and her similes in the first verse. Very enjoyable listen!
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Postby jamestoffee » January 9th, 2012, 2:14 am

Hi Andy,

andygetch wrote:Quite possibly the first time in song history that SSG has been rhymed with viligantly!

LOL :lol: You're probably right.

andygetch wrote:The one thing that threw me a little is the his and her similes in the first verse.


Thanks for pointing that out as a source of confusion....I was trying to paint a bit of a whole imagery with spiral stairs, a dragon, a princess....basically a "fantasy" mentality/scene.....

.....I was hoping it being a simile wouldn't seem like a gender confusion; but I can see how it could be by being stated so early in the song....The idea was to be cut off from the "real world" and be fine with it....ie Rapunzel not waiting around for a prince, but content "doing her castle tower thing"

Thanks for the listen and post :D ....on to week 11 :wink:

James
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Postby andygetch » January 9th, 2012, 4:13 am

maybe the dragon could be a she :)
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Postby jamestoffee » January 9th, 2012, 4:20 am

andygetch wrote:maybe the dragon could be a she :)

That could be....then change wife to spouse.....throw it over to Lady Gaga and watch it climb the charts! :wink: LOL
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