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Chris C wrote:I'm not sure that the "wishing" aspect of the chorus classes as describing only 'objects and actions', but I also never let the 'rules' get in the way of a song if it wants to go in a certain direction.
Hobson wrote:Using "cry" may more closely fit the assignment, but "wish" works a lot better, IMHO.
Hobson wrote:The first time I read this, I assumed that it was about a girlfriend/wife. But going back, I see that it could be about a parent or son/daughter or brother/sister. Maybe it would help to add one verse describing the person or the relationship.
Vic Lewis VL wrote:I'm a little bit paranoid at the moment that everything I write sounds like someone else
A party clown with no job
Can't do this alone
I wish you were here
sounds more like pure JamesToffee
......if a person sounds like an opera singer, but they don't like opera....should they sing it to please others.....maybe if they are paid for it, or enjoy helping other people enjoy the music.....
Nick wrote:Shouldn't the first line be something like:
The candles melt on the cake from the heat of the flame
Nick wrote:And besides that, if it doesn't really fit, who cares? I'm not grading you. I wanted to but David said no.
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