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Postby Celt » March 19th, 2011, 9:42 am

Well I guess it's never too late to jump back into SSG
So what The heck!

It's Too Late


You come 'round begging me to take you back
I tell you I'd rather have a heart attack
There's nothing left between you and me
I ain't goin' back to that use to be
Can't you hear what I'm trying to say
It's the same answer now as it was yesterday
I can't say it any other way
It's too late

You ran around ruined my name
All you can give me is more of the same
Stole my money wrecked my car
Ran up a tab at my favorite bar
So what is a man like me suppose to do
Waste more of my precious time on you
Can't you get it in your head we're through
It's too late

It's too late for this it's too late for that
It's too late for more your ideal chit chat
I know to you this may sound strange
But I've made up my mind I ain't gonna change
So listen baby can't you hear
I've said it now let me make it clear
I don't want you anywhere near
It's too late
It's too late
It's too late

John
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Postby Vic Lewis VL » March 19th, 2011, 6:14 pm

First impressions.....you got a couple of lines, thought, "hmm, that could make a song...." - and got it written as quickly as you could. I always start with a 12-bar blues in mind when you post lyrics, John - and this works pretty much perfectly there. Just needs a little tidying up and a couple of typos correcting....

"Ran up a tab at the my favorite bar"....lose the word "the."

"So what is a man like me suppose to".....add the word "do" at the end.

"Waste more time on someone like you"....not someone LIKE you, but you....the subject of the song. maybe "Waste more of my precious time on you" would work better.

Minor quibbles, though....now get recording!

:D :D :D

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Postby Celt » March 19th, 2011, 7:12 pm

Thanks Vic

You are always the best proofreader and the suggestion on the "time "line
is perfect.

Actually this was written as a 16 bar Blues.

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Postby jamestoffee » March 20th, 2011, 5:24 am

Hi John,

Looking good....clear message :D Nothing to add but the MP3 request :wink:

Thanks for sharing.

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Postby wilhelmina » March 20th, 2011, 5:52 am

I really love this! It's witty, it's sharp, it's hilarious, it's to the point, and you even have rhymes! Why didn't I write something like this? It comes off so smooth that it sounds as though it just rolled out of your head ready made. This inspires me! I hope you're back on a writing jag. I'll be on the lookout for you. Wilhelmina.
p.s. I do notice that you have a LOT more posts than I do, and I know this matters. So I'll just keep slugging away.
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Postby Celt » March 20th, 2011, 5:09 pm

I wish it that easy Wilhelmina. I haven't been able to write anything for
about 15 weeks . A combination of writers bloke and real life getting
in the way.

But Thanks anyway and I'm looking forward to checking out your songs.

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Postby martin-6 » March 20th, 2011, 5:42 pm

I agree with the sentiment that this is a good'un.

I'm not normally a fan of songs that take one idea and reiterate it over and over without much development, but in this case, it seems to work perfectly!

Good luck with your writer's block and hope this has unblocked it.
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