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by chefie
October 26th, 2014, 7:04 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W52 The Ballad of Saint Jerry Garcia Vampire Slayer
Replies: 9
Views: 2125

Re: Y12W52 The Ballad of Saint Jerry Garcia Vampire Slayer

Okay, James,

You took the challenge and did an admiral job! Well done!

Neil
by chefie
October 2nd, 2014, 9:31 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W48 Five Tequila Shots Ago
Replies: 5
Views: 1693

Re: Y12W48 Five Tequila Shots Ago

Hi James,

Cute . . . . in a good way. Made me smile. One teeny tiny idea . . . . change your last
5 tequila shots ago
to
5 tequila shots to go . . . . .
Neil
by chefie
September 13th, 2014, 6:16 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W45 Any Wrong I'm Sorry For
Replies: 9
Views: 1979

Re: Y12W45 Any Wrong I'm Sorry For

Hi James, Any thoughts on changing this line: Murdered on the 22nd of January ‘73 to Legalized on the 22nd of January ‘73 I think it's a matter of the POV you want, or not want, to put forward. There's always the third option . . . . . . "Legally murdered on the 22nd of January '73. And, after some ...
by chefie
September 7th, 2014, 8:45 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W45 Any Wrong I'm Sorry For
Replies: 9
Views: 1979

Re: Y12W45 Any Wrong I'm Sorry For

Hi James, Particularly loved what you've done with the music. Imagery was done without making it seem too morbid. Two things I'm wondering about . . . . . first (and minor) is in the last verse where I met a man in a white coat To differentiate it from the first verse I'd suggest changing it to a wh...
by chefie
September 7th, 2014, 7:44 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W44 Procrastination
Replies: 8
Views: 1956

Re: Y12W44 Procrastination

Thanks, JMR, and welcome to the Sunday Songwriters Forum!

Neil
by chefie
September 5th, 2014, 9:30 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W44 Procrastination
Replies: 8
Views: 1956

Re: Y12W44 Procrastination

Thanks John.

Neil
by chefie
September 4th, 2014, 8:33 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W44 Procrastination
Replies: 8
Views: 1956

Re: Y12W44 Procrastination

Thanks David, Paul, & James for your comments! I always chose the third Great suggestion. Done Regarding the I've got maybe on my mind verse . . . . Maybe something like I've got maybe on my mind Always making choices by running out of time Afraid to make a single stand, choosing not to choose Not c...
by chefie
September 3rd, 2014, 3:35 pm
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W44 Procrastination
Replies: 8
Views: 1956

Y12W44 Procrastination

PROCRASTINATION http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=12905300&q=hi I’m just sitting here and I’m waiting people think that I’m procrastinating all of them gossiping that I just don’t care but I’m the one that’s sitting in this big uneasy chair maybe I will, maybe I won't maybe ...
by chefie
August 22nd, 2014, 6:44 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W42 42 of Us
Replies: 8
Views: 1817

Re: Y12W42 42 of Us

Well done! Thanks, James.

Neil
by chefie
August 16th, 2014, 7:27 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W41 Dad's otel
Replies: 4
Views: 1293

Re: Y12W41 Dad's otel

Thanks James and John,
Been pretty busy this week and not much time to work on rewrites. James: Some very good points and very helpful. John, appreciate you listening in.

Neil
by chefie
August 13th, 2014, 10:34 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W41 Dad's otel
Replies: 4
Views: 1293

Y12W41 Dad's otel

DAD'S OTEL http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=12885482&q=hi I remember when I played here and fine folk used to stay here and all the dignitaries, escorting lovely ladies people waiting in succession to stay in a penthouse built in heaven I was just a little boy and this hote...
by chefie
April 19th, 2014, 4:37 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W24 - 24/7
Replies: 7
Views: 1592

Re: Y12W24 - 24/7

Hi James,
nit-pickings
Maybe, but they're sure a big help. Thanks!

Neil
by chefie
April 18th, 2014, 2:39 pm
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W24 - 24/7
Replies: 7
Views: 1592

Re: Y12W24 - 24/7

Hi Vic,
This is a song I actually find quite difficult to come to terms with
Yeah, it's difficult being a member of this club when you'd rather not . . . .
Music soon . . . . . I hope.

Thanks,

Neil
by chefie
April 18th, 2014, 1:14 pm
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W24 - 24/7
Replies: 7
Views: 1592

Re: Y12W24 - 24/7

Thanks for the suggestions Hobson. I'm kinda stuck on the statues of stone line for the moment, maybe someone else will chime in and move my stubbornness. And you're spot on regarding the picture line . . . . . I've already changed it in a rewrite to something very similar to your suggestion. Thanks...
by chefie
April 18th, 2014, 6:23 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y12W24 - 24/7
Replies: 7
Views: 1592

Y12W24 - 24/7

Hmmm, where is everyone? I don't think I've ever seen a week go by without a post for the assignment. Not quite finished and have not worked out the music yet . . . . . 24/7 verse 1 I wake up each morning and it’s always the same expecting to see you, but you’re not there again but I go on living, w...