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by chefie
February 6th, 2016, 8:23 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Year 14 Week 14 Downtime Blues MP3 Added
Replies: 7
Views: 3900

Re: Year 14 Week 14 Downtime Blues

The rewrite did it for me. Good Job. When the music is done I'd love to hear it.
Neil
by chefie
December 15th, 2015, 3:16 pm
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y14W4 - Nobody's Waiting
Replies: 3
Views: 1343

Re: Y14W4 - Nobody's Waiting

Very nice rewrite. Well worth the wait.

Neil
by chefie
November 28th, 2015, 6:55 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y14W4 - Nobody's Waiting
Replies: 3
Views: 1343

Re: Y14W4 - Nobody's Waiting

Very interesting lyrics and overall, a very nice job. A couple of suggestions. In verse one There was something about your radical views, But you had nothing to say. I wonder if you could be a little more specific about the radical views . . . . . . what the news said or implied about them . . . . ....
by chefie
October 30th, 2015, 6:27 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y13W52 - Life's Not Forever
Replies: 4
Views: 1366

Re: Y13W52 - Life's Not Forever

Thanks, John

Neil
by chefie
October 27th, 2015, 9:35 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y13W52 - Life's Not Forever
Replies: 4
Views: 1366

Re: Y13W52 - Life's Not Forever

"I’m with you always though our forever is no more?" Good point and your suggested line is an easy and great fix. "that life is not forever and forever never seems to end and love is a gift that I give to you to help your broken heart mend" I guess I wanted to say that while life ends, living witho...
by chefie
October 27th, 2015, 8:22 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y13W52 - Life's Not Forever
Replies: 4
Views: 1366

Y13W52 - Life's Not Forever

LIFE'S NOT FOREVER http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=13240742&q=hi You can’t see me, you can’t hear me anymore you can’t feel me put my arms around you like I’ve done a hundred times before and I wish there was some way I could tell you some way to help you understand the re...
by chefie
October 3rd, 2015, 6:42 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y13W48 Moon‏ Over Cat Sanova
Replies: 8
Views: 2341

Re: Y13W48 Moon‏ Over Cat Sanova

Add my congrats, too, James. Your contributions to this forum will be missed.

Neil
by chefie
June 7th, 2015, 7:30 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y13W32 Lifesavers and Lollipops
Replies: 4
Views: 1266

Re: Y13W32 Lifesavers and Lollipops

Hi James, First of all, this is a GREAT take on the assignment. Well done. I love the whole idea. A couple of thoughts . . . . . I'd like to see the song develop a little more gradually. At the very least, another verse added before the first chorus. Maybe a little bit more descriptive of flavors. T...
by chefie
April 19th, 2015, 7:54 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Year 13 Week 25 - Land of Heartbreak
Replies: 6
Views: 2737

Year 13 Week 25 - Land of Heartbreak

Writing's been tough lately. Seems I manage a verse or two every week and nothing more. This is an older song I wrote that managed to fulfill the assighnment. Thanks for your comments. Land of Heartbreak http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=13104069&q=hi Fmaj7 G If I sat down an...
by chefie
December 6th, 2014, 9:19 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y13W5 You are Blessed (A Wedding Song)
Replies: 6
Views: 1550

Re: Y13W5 You are Blessed (A Wedding Song)

HI James,

Nicely done!

Neil
by chefie
November 29th, 2014, 9:06 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y13W4 If It's the Last Thing That I Do
Replies: 2
Views: 1097

Re: Y13W4 If It's the Last Thing That I Do

Thanks, James.

Neil
by chefie
November 28th, 2014, 1:14 pm
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y13W4 The Last of Us
Replies: 2
Views: 1012

Re: Y13W4 The Last of Us

Hi James, Overall I really like what you've done . . . . . the tone and expression. I wonder if the 2 line sentiment followed by "it's looking like the last of us" is a little too brief. I normally don't do this, but I played around with this, added another line or 2 just to see if it might work bet...
by chefie
November 28th, 2014, 12:56 pm
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y13, W4 - The Last. Time I Smiled
Replies: 4
Views: 1981

Re: Y13, W4 - The Last. Time I Smiled

Hi Vic, Nice to see you back! Just a few suggestions. There's a lot of emotion here and difficult to sort out. Lots of repetition, too. I was wondering if you started with your second verse as your first . . . . . and although I understand the IV's and tubes, not sure it works with the direction . ....
by chefie
November 28th, 2014, 11:42 am
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y13W4 If It's the Last Thing That I Do
Replies: 2
Views: 1097

Y13W4 If It's the Last Thing That I Do

IF IT'S THE LAST THING THAT I DO http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=12983358&q=hi I don’t know if there’s a reason but I’m here just the same and I’m not sure what I believe in but I don’t need anyone to blame don’t know how much time I have but I’m sure I’ll leave on cue but...
by chefie
November 20th, 2014, 4:20 pm
Forum: Sunday Songwriters Group
Topic: Y13W3 You Are Here
Replies: 4
Views: 1303

Re: Y13W3 You Are Here

HI James, First of all, I love your choice of "you are here". It works really great in your chorus with such a simple and direct statement, and music to match. Your solo fit in well. But for some reason, and I'm sorry, I can't even express why, but your last verse doesn't have the clarity of your fi...